nyxelestia

Haha powerplay and rebellion in a position of being oppressed kind of is wonderful :p Basically the way you pretty much had minority/oppressed aspects of people just coming out of the woodwork and pretty much owning the majority force. I'd start with magick. First of all, the concept of magick in this world is horrifying to people. Total dominion over the human world through the power of something somebody couldn't understand. The inversion of the idea of something terrible can be used to save people was a nice start. Yanno, reversing the idea of a power of corruption to save innocents. I know i'm wording the obvious, but I really liked the way you introduced it. What proceeded from there that I really found interesting was the bond formed between Merlin and the magician being burned. The strangely intense intimacy that seemed to develop and bond over the course of what, thirty minutes?, was first of all really nice to read, but also added to it. Then the crux of the usage of magick here as a theme really really got to me with the juxtaposition of the Lord's prayer. The way you braided pretty much hardcore sorcery and for God's sake the Lord's prayer together creates this really strong balance of extremes. It was considered profane (by Uther) but it all the more enhance this. The blend of the oppressed (sorcery and the magician's whole character) directly fighting against the oppressed (the lord's prayer, embracing as opposed to fearing retribution). But what I loved most about that is the way that the magician yes, was fated to inevitable death but he was still in his doomed state was able to still stand up and pretty much try and perhaps even succeed to mess around with fate. Whether be it that the magician did anything magickal or not, he pretty much empowered his own ability to choose and decide, and even managed to control and override the fates of others. The reversal of role, even among those doomed to die and those destined to fate is totally reversed. The man destined to die right there embraced a fate that we are supposed to run all the more just embraces his fate, making it his. The two final bits that made this really, really beautiful was the part that made the magician charecter so human, but not at the same time. The first being that he had no identity~ no name et cetera. The next was the sheer power he had~ forgiving Uther for his behaviour. Haha~ that's pretty much my favorite points that I noticed, the rest of it should be just as obvious.